This was was definitely on point tonight, especially with the script. I can’t say that enough. There are so many quotes I got from this radio show, I didn’t even get to write them all down. Here are some screen shots of some of the quotes and personal thoughts:
I did like the bumper for the radio show in the beginning with the song “Too Close” playing after many suspenseful noir sounds led into the song. I found this ironic since the main lyric of the song is, “And it feels like I’m too close to love you,” which can allude to the feelings the women had about Lawrence since he ended up getting too close in the end. His narration starting the show was perfect because it introduced all of the female characters/possible suspects. He was really embellished as a downright horrible womanizer when he would have sexual relations with each woman and leave in the morning. Can’t forget how he took their food too and the watch of the one woman’s deceased husband (it was hard for me to keep track of the names of each one to be honest. Too busy writing notes!). The sound effects illustrated how he died at the dinner table, sounds such as him gasping for air and him falling from the chair. Each woman had their own script and this made them distinct from each other. Even with the constant flashbacks, each character also had sounds associated with their story telling. For example, the diner bells clanging when Lawrence enters is placed in the monologue of the woman he met in the diner. Most seemed to be a femme fatale and the one who had the British accent came off as more innocent, but definitely not naive, especially in how she called Lawrence, “a pathetic piece of a man.” I also wrote down the quote “Men are so gullible it’s almost pathetic,” which I found that a lot of the monologue was very realistic in how women can perceive men. Well done in that department. The monologues were very honest and true to the women who spoke them. They are pieces I would see myself wanting to listen to or even read.
My only issues I really had were how there wasn’t an obvious break to commercials, such as an announcement or repeated sound indicating the end of a segment. It threw me off at some points since I didn’t expect to get to a commercial that quickly after the person spoke. A symbolic sound to the “Get a Clue” station may have helped with this. Also, the Tiffanys commercial was one I didn’t personally understand and I assume it is related to “Breakfast at Tiffany’s” and I have never seen that ( I am so uncultured, I know). It was too quiet and a bit muffled, which maybe was done to get an old-time effect, but I wasn’t entirely sure. Also I recently came back to this post and thought about how the killer was easy to pick out since their monologue was saved for the end and it became predictable. Next time, have a character or two come back to throw off the audience.
All in all, great concept for a radio show. This was a radio show I was planning on listening to since I always liked playing Clue. Sister loved Monopoly and I was never about that. Clue was the way to go every time. This game fits perfectly with the idea of noir and I am happy you guys utilized it to the full effect.